Re: csa2 chronicles: the next generation?

[smentzer@pacbell.net (Steve Mentzer)]

>
>Captains log:  We've been trapped here in the delta quadrant for over
>two years, inching our way back to Federation space.  Recently, scans
>have indicated traces of a dilithium power signature, indicating
>alpha quadrant technology.  We are moving to investigate.
>


Bravo!

Great work... 

However, might I suggest a few changes.

1 - Make nathan mates have a wormhole materialize in his holiest of 
    holies, and then he instantly get transported within himself
    which would probably be nirvana to him.

2 - If the above is too strange, make nathan a martyr. Lets say that someone
    copied the phonograph from the voyager probe and subsequently tranferred
    some of the music to several thousand node computers across the galaxy.

    Nathan should spend the rest of his existence hunting down these illegal
    copies of the music and destroy the mothership that these copies reside
    on. Even though many millions of people will suffer, you will hear 
    nathan preaching about the copyright laws of the 21st century.. And most
    of all, his opinion of right and wrong is more important than the views
    of any civilization or individual.

    Most people will learn to hate him, but nathan enjoys being a martyr.
    Wait, isn't it this way now?

can I help you write?

smentzer@pacbell.net